<table class="s_table"> <tbody> <tr> <td> <p> </p> <p><img src="elaboration_strategies_5adca7daba9c4.png" alt="" id="" title="" /></p> </td> <td> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; font-style: italic; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">You've written your presentation draft and had a day or two to let it "sit." Take some time to review your draft to see how well you developed your ideas using elaboration strategies. The difference between a good presentation and a captivating presentation is often the judicious use of <span style="color: #008000;">elaboration strategies.</span></span></p> <br /> <div style="margin-left: 0pt;" dir="ltr"> <table style="border-width: initial; border-style: none; border-color: initial; width: 468pt;"><colgroup><col width="*" /></colgroup> <tbody> <tr style="height: 0pt;"> <td style="vertical-align: top; padding: 5pt 5pt 5pt 5pt; border: solid #000000 1pt;"> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">ELABORATION means giving more substance and detail in your writing. Depending on the type of writing, you can use specific techniques to develop your writing. </span></p> </td> </tr> </tbody> </table> </div> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">For </span><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; font-style: italic; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">persuasive </span><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">writing, check out the strategies </span><a href="http://www.mansfieldct.gov/filestorage/6715/20821/Elaboration_Strategies_for_Persuasive_Writing.pdf"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #1155cc; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">linked here</span></a><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">. </span><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; font-style: italic; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"><br /></span></p> <br /> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">For </span><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; font-style: italic; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">personal narrative</span><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> and </span><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; font-style: italic; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">fictional </span><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">writing, review the techniques below and check your draft. Make some revisions to that draft using these techniques.</span></p> </td> </tr> <tr> <td colspan="2"> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><em><span style="font-size: 24px; font-family: Calibri; color: #008000; font-weight: bold; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">ELABORATION TECHNIQUES FOR NARRATIVE WRITING</span></em></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 9pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Adapted from these sources:</span></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><a href="http://www.myteacherpages.com/webpages/skearney/files/Elaboration%20Techniques.pdf"><span style="font-size: 9pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">http://www.myteacherpages.com/webpages/skearney/files/Elaboration%20Techniques.pdf</span></a></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><a href="http://www.mansfieldct.gov/filestorage/6715/20821/Elaboration_Strategies_for_Persuasive_Writing.pdf"><span style="font-size: 9pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">http://www.mansfieldct.gov/filestorage/6715/20821/Elaboration_Strategies_for_Persuasive_Writing.pdf</span></a></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><a href="http://www.nthurston.k12.wa.us/cms/lib/.../Expository%20Essay%20DEFINITIONS.pptx"><span style="font-size: 9pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">www.nthurston.k12.wa.us/cms/lib/.../Expository%20Essay%20DEFINITIONS.pptx</span></a></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><a style="text-decoration-line: underline;" href="http://busyteacher.org/6451-7-strategies-for-elaboration.html"><span style="font-size: 9pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">http://busyteacher.org/6451-7-strategies-for-elaboration.html</span></a></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"> </p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Describe a Place in Detail</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Review your writing and look for any mention of a place. By describing that location in more detail, you enable your readers to feel like they were actually there in the experience you’re describing.</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Use Specific Words to Paint Pictures</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 11pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Look at the difference between these sentences:</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt; margin-left: 36pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> I went to the mailbox. </span></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt; margin-left: 36pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> I ran to the mailbox. </span></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt; margin-left: 36pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> I staggered to the mailbox. </span></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt; margin-left: 36pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> I plodded to the mailbox.</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Which sentences are more engaging to you? By using vivid verbs, concrete and specific nouns, and crisp adjectives, you can enhance the appeal of your writing. Pull out that thesaurus and replace the tired, overused words with the perfect description that helps your reader visualize the content.</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Here’s another example of the difference:</span></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"><br class="kix-line-break" /></span><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">DRAFT: The first one I really enjoy is the chocolate chip cookie. I especially like them when they’re warm and soft. I like the way the chocolate just melts in your mouth. I also love the flavor of a warm chocolate chip cookie right when you bite into it. It’s like being in heaven.</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">REVISION: A juicy chip, soft, creamy butter, a crunchy nut combine to make a delicious cookie. The soft, brown cookie melts in my mouth, then a chip melts in my mouth and it’s like being in heaven. I know it, my brother knows it – biting into one of mom’s freshly baked chocolate chip cookies is like your own paradise even on a cold day. </span><span style="font-size: 9pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">(</span><a href="http://www.nthurston.k12.wa.us/cms/lib/.../Expository%20Essay%20DEFINITIONS.pptx"><span style="font-size: 9pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">www.nthurston.k12.wa.us/cms/lib/.../Expository%20Essay%20DEFINITIONS.pptx</span></a><span style="font-size: 9pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">)</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Show How Something Feels, Smells, Tastes, Sounds or Looks</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Sensory information in particular helps to paint that picture. Describe what a person, place, object, etc. look like, sound like, smell like, feeling like, and taste like. This helps you readers to feel like they were there.</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Compare Two Different Things and Use Figurative Language (similes, metaphors, alliteration, hyperbole, etc.)</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Using similes and metaphors helps readers draw connections what you present and the knowledge and experiences they bring to your writing. Keep them engaged through these types of analogies. Figurative language in general helps keep the language interesting. </span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Use the Exact Thoughts or Words from a Person</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Try using quotations from famous people to add appeal, or add in bits of conversation and the thoughts of the people in your writing. This helps readers to feel like they were really there or really in your shoes. </span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Describe How Someone or Something Moves or Acts</span></p> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 12pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Adverbs may come to your mind first, but in order to help readers picture the action that drives your story, focus on using very specific verbs. Saying “she cried hard all night” (using the adverb </span><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; font-style: italic; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">hard</span><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">) isn’t quite as compelling as “She sobbed all night.” Remember the maxim “show, don’t tell” to make writing stronger.</span></p> <span><span><br /></span></span> <p style="line-height: 1.2; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 0pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 15pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #222222; font-weight: bold; text-decoration-line: underline; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Show Someone’s Feelings Through What He Does</span></p> <p style="line-height: 1.3800000000000001; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 10pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Show, don’t tell. Here’s an example:</span></p> <p style="line-height: 1.3800000000000001; margin-top: 0pt; margin-bottom: 10pt;" dir="ltr"><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">“Instead of writing, ‘She was depressed,’… show those feelings to … readers by writing about the character’s actions: ‘She grabbed the last tissue from the box and dabbed her eyes. She threw it on the floor with the others. She did not change out of her pajamas all day, and she sat in front of the television not even changing the channel though she had no interest in the program that was on.’” (http://busyteacher.org/6451-7-strategies-for-elaboration.html) </span></p> <p><span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: Calibri; color: #000000; background-color: transparent; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> </span></p> </td> </tr> </tbody> </table> <p> </p> <p> </p> <p>https://docs.google.com/document/d/1m6mVy3V6fbmkIdphJHOjsm2cyvoe2KY2uCheo90QdNw/edit</p>